A warm breeze gusted but still did not cool the hot summer weather outside. My mom and I were in Chicago, it was my first time at Six Flags Great America. The cars lined the parking lot, every one waiting for their adrenaline rush. I started in awe as the gigantic metal beasts lured me to come and try not to scream. Our first coaster of the day, Raging Bull.
"Don't you want to go into the front row?"
"Umm, Mom, I think you are crazy. I am not going in front we are going to die."
My legs trembled in fear and I was anxious for the ride, above the staircase the whooshing sound of a charging coaster flew by, followed be screams and joyful laughing. It was going so fast it pulled the hair off my face and we weren't even on the roller coaster yet.
"You go ahead, and go in first."
"No way, Mom. If any one is falling off the first ride it's you and not me!"
I was frightened, I love roller coasters but the first feelings of nervousness never get better. The clicking brought me back to real life, this is going to be awesome. Then came the drop…
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
This is very nice. The narrative is good and explains your experience nicely.
ReplyDeleteI like how you did a great job with the narrative and it makes the reader nervous.
ReplyDeleteThat was good, I liked how you showed your fear.
ReplyDeleteHahaha! I totally felt the same way too!!! But for me I just closed my eyes, it was such an amazing ride and you really made it sound the way this ride is. An adrenaline rush.. I LOVE IT!! :D
ReplyDeleteI hated the ride, and loved this piece. Raging bull just scares me to death. First time I went on it I was terrified and scared. I loved the piece because it felt the exact same way for me except I never went on the ride again. I agree with Austin that it does expresses your experience nice. Great job!
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